Comments on: Combining First Person Narration with Viewpoint Characters: Why? How? Where? https://booksbywomen.org/combining-first-person-narration-with-viewpoint-characters-why-how-where-by-bonnie-burstow/ Wed, 04 Sep 2019 22:57:30 +0000 hourly 1 https://wordpress.org/?v=6.5.3 By: Laura Boede https://booksbywomen.org/combining-first-person-narration-with-viewpoint-characters-why-how-where-by-bonnie-burstow/#comment-49957 Wed, 04 Sep 2019 22:57:30 +0000 http://booksbywomen.org/?p=20789#comment-49957 Hello,
I am also having an issue with multiple POVs. I have a scene, for instance, where my protagonist and her husband are at a doctor appointment. I mainly focus on the protagonists POV, but I also give some of the Doctor’s, and husband’s, as well. Also, in the next scene, I have both the protagonist and her husband’s POV. For example:

“‘I honestly think–” Todd began, but Erin stopped him.
“No! I don’t want to talk about it now; let’s just walk and talk about nothing important, please.” She’d said ‘please’ with such feeling, he didn’t push the subject, deciding instead, to enjoy her company and the feel of her soft hand in his. The sun felt warm on their backs and red-winged blackbirds sat on the telephone wires above them without a care in the world.
Erin looked at her husband; he wasn’t overly handsome, but she didn’t care; she wasn’t too much to look at herself. He was strong but gentle with her, and they laughed a lot…'”

This might not be the best example I have, but I hope you get the idea. You get to know what both are thinking and feeling and what they want. I think it’s a good way to keep the story going and make it interesting, instead of having to wait for a new chapter to know what’s going on in the heads of the other characters in the scene.

I originally started out with Erin’s first-person POV, and then the narrator takes over for a while. Then, when my second protagonist (male) is introduced, it was written in his first-person POV. Then, when they meet, it becomes the third person with everyone’s POV, as above, ending in each of the two main character’s POVs after they are separated and heading back home, for dramatic effect, but someone said they didn’t like that, and I figured an agent wouldn’t either, so I changed it, but I still like that way best.

I hope this makes sense to you. If not, I will send better examples to help you understand. I hope it helps you to know that you aren’t the only writer with this issue, and I’m glad you’ve shared it, so I know that I’m not the only one, either.

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By: Bonnie Burstow https://booksbywomen.org/combining-first-person-narration-with-viewpoint-characters-why-how-where-by-bonnie-burstow/#comment-49034 Sat, 10 Feb 2018 19:08:04 +0000 http://booksbywomen.org/?p=20789#comment-49034 In reply to Dorothy.

Thanks for letting me know. Yes, I think this way of writing is very effective and in very short order, it does not bother the reader.

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By: Dorothy https://booksbywomen.org/combining-first-person-narration-with-viewpoint-characters-why-how-where-by-bonnie-burstow/#comment-49019 Wed, 07 Feb 2018 19:47:49 +0000 http://booksbywomen.org/?p=20789#comment-49019 I have just finished reading ‘I am Watching You’ by Teresa Driscoll and she uses this technique. The main character is written in the first person, and viewpoint characters are written in third person. The jumping around was initially a surprise, but as you have said, it enabled the readers to learn things which the main character couldn’t know. Once I understood what was happening, I appreciated the technique.

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